Let's see here.. I'm a bit of a conformist (but don't sue me if I make a mistake), be ye warned. I'm not going to suggest poems that were excluded from the finals, though.
This quote taken from http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Limerick_(poetry)
"The rhyme scheme is usually "A-A-B-B-A", with a rather rigid meter. The first, second, and fifth lines are three metrical feet; the third and fourth two metrical feet. The foot used is usually the amphibrach, a stressed syllable between two unstressed ones. However it can be considered an anapestic foot, two short syllables and then a long, the reverse of dactyl rhythm. However, many substitutions are common.
The first line traditionally introduces a person and a location, and usually ends with the name of the location, though sometimes with that of the person. A true limerick is supposed to have a kind of twist to it. This may lie in the final line, or it may lie in the way the rhymes are often intentionally tortured, or in both. Though not a strict requirement, the best limericks are usually those that additionally show some form of internal rhyme, often alliteration, sometimes assonance or another form of rhyme."
I just thought it might be useful to the judging process.
My thoughts on the poems (no offense intended)
Form:
#1: The 5th line's meter is incorrect
#2: The 1st line's meter doesn't match the 2nd and 5th. The 3rd doesn't match the 4th.
#3: The meter is not consistent. Lines 3 and 4 don't rhyme; the 5th line doesn't rhyme with the 1st and 2nd.
#4: Doesn't rhyme on the 5th line, incorrect meter on the 1st and 5th lines. Lines 3 and 4 don't rhyme.
#5 The 5th line has 3 "categories" of poop; unfortunately 'butt nuggets' and 'dirt snakes' are both 'feces', so it doesn't make much sense. Incorrect meter in the 2nd line.
#6 The 4th line is awkward. The inflection of a vocal recital would place emphasis on the word 'a', which isn't a good word on which to have emphasis.
#7 The last line has inconsistent meter with the first two.
Content:
#1: similar to #2.. not as good/creative
#2: I haven't heard the phrase "cutting the mustard" before. Does that refer to farting, or a slight expulsion of intestinal juices, or an actual emergence of a solid?
#3: I like the idea of communicating with excretion. ...but onomatopoeia? I think it's awkward.
#4: The fourth line seems to imply that the fiber was inserted through the anus instead of being swallowed.
#5: Mixing religion, atheism, and excretion? Brilliant.
#6: This poem captures the basic essence of solid excretion.
#7: I don't like the word "Bayonne." I also dislike the last line.. All food's on loan? I don't understand.
meh. My thoughts may or may not reflect those of others.
Well done, for all chosen.
Of these, my favorites are numbers 2, 5, and 6; I vote for..
Contest #21: Poop Limericks | Vote now!
juiop (34) -- 06.05.2006
Let's see here.. I'm a bit of a conformist (but don't sue me if I make a mistake), be ye warned. I'm not going to suggest poems that were excluded from the finals, though.
This quote taken from http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Limerick_(poetry)
"The rhyme scheme is usually "A-A-B-B-A", with a rather rigid meter. The first, second, and fifth lines are three metrical feet; the third and fourth two metrical feet. The foot used is usually the amphibrach, a stressed syllable between two unstressed ones. However it can be considered an anapestic foot, two short syllables and then a long, the reverse of dactyl rhythm. However, many substitutions are common.
The first line traditionally introduces a person and a location, and usually ends with the name of the location, though sometimes with that of the person. A true limerick is supposed to have a kind of twist to it. This may lie in the final line, or it may lie in the way the rhymes are often intentionally tortured, or in both. Though not a strict requirement, the best limericks are usually those that additionally show some form of internal rhyme, often alliteration, sometimes assonance or another form of rhyme."
I just thought it might be useful to the judging process.
My thoughts on the poems (no offense intended)
Form:
#1: The 5th line's meter is incorrect
#2: The 1st line's meter doesn't match the 2nd and 5th. The 3rd doesn't match the 4th.
#3: The meter is not consistent. Lines 3 and 4 don't rhyme; the 5th line doesn't rhyme with the 1st and 2nd.
#4: Doesn't rhyme on the 5th line, incorrect meter on the 1st and 5th lines. Lines 3 and 4 don't rhyme.
#5 The 5th line has 3 "categories" of poop; unfortunately 'butt nuggets' and 'dirt snakes' are both 'feces', so it doesn't make much sense. Incorrect meter in the 2nd line.
#6 The 4th line is awkward. The inflection of a vocal recital would place emphasis on the word 'a', which isn't a good word on which to have emphasis.
#7 The last line has inconsistent meter with the first two.
Content:
#1: similar to #2.. not as good/creative
#2: I haven't heard the phrase "cutting the mustard" before. Does that refer to farting, or a slight expulsion of intestinal juices, or an actual emergence of a solid?
#3: I like the idea of communicating with excretion. ...but onomatopoeia? I think it's awkward.
#4: The fourth line seems to imply that the fiber was inserted through the anus instead of being swallowed.
#5: Mixing religion, atheism, and excretion? Brilliant.
#6: This poem captures the basic essence of solid excretion.
#7: I don't like the word "Bayonne." I also dislike the last line.. All food's on loan? I don't understand.
meh. My thoughts may or may not reflect those of others.
Well done, for all chosen.
Of these, my favorites are numbers 2, 5, and 6; I vote for..
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